darden smith commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"nice, but try to focus it a bit. seems a bit lyrical for the song. just a thought."
(more)"There will come a time when you can make it on your own your memories will sustain you that’s how much you’ve grown"
"I’ll stay here with you and hold your hand just like you did for me I’d take your place if I could either way The outcomes the same the only thing I’ll be missing is you"
jaynesachs commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"Ahhh sad story here. I can see why she’d be holding on to her baby’s picture. 💔"
(more)"It’s been so long since I’ve seen life in your eyes I know there’s one thing that can bring back your smile again to be holding our baby instead of that picture again"
jaynesachs commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"Hey! Check this against Chris’s melody for a guide. It will help you trim it down to the basics and also allow it to be sung. Ie..
You can’t pretend it isn’t there everyday/
When you’re looking for something but can’t find the words to say "
"It’s not something you can pretend doesn’t matter it’s always there day to day the feeling you should be looking for something but you can’t even find the right words to say."
jaynesachs commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"Really nice thoughts. I agree we should not want to forget anything but learn from everything if we can. This would have to be trimmed down a lot
to fit the flow or cadence of the melody. If you listen to the clip at the end of the video you’ll hear the melody that we’re fitting lyrics too. Just try to sing your lyrics to what Chris is doing as a guide. "
"Now that I know the power of a memory I feel bad for trying to forget when someone hurt me or when he wouldn’t stay if you have precious memories hold tight and pray nothing takes them away."
darden smith commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"nice, but try to focus it a bit. seems a bit lyrical for the song. just a thought."
(more)"There will come a time when you can make it on your own your memories will sustain you that’s how much you’ve grown"
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jaynesachs commented on PoeticJustice's lyric:
"Hello!!! Nice writing."
(more)"I’ll stay here with you and hold your hand just like you did for me I’d take your place if I could either way The outcomes the same the only thing I’ll be missing is you"