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    I have the last line stuck in my head as, when we can have a REAL good time. But that contains an extra syllable. However, it seems more singable. This will keep me up all night! LOL

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    Thank you for the feedback!

    Here's an edited version-

    Well I could print a map
    Draw a little picture
    Read the facts
    Line-by-Line
    Why do that?
    When we can have a good time
    (And) I'm never gonna change your mind!

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    Ok that's weird. sometimes I write a whole thing and when I hit submit it disappears! here I go again:

    Here's a way you can rework this verse with humor and also have it fit!

    I could unfold this map
    Draw a little picture
    State my facts
    Thousands of times (taking my stand)
    But I'll look back
    (Knowing when the truth unwinds)
    I&apos…

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    Ok that's weird. sometimes I write a whole thing and when I hit submit it disappears! here I go again:

    Here's a way you can rework this verse with humor and also have it fit!

    I could unfold this map
    Draw a little picture
    State my facts
    Thousands of times (taking my stand)
    But I'll look back
    (Knowing when the truth unwinds)
    I'm never gonna change your mind

    this is NOT finished but shows you all the whacky things I try…

    the stuff in parenthesis are other options or lines on the way to the final lines maybe…
    keep playing with it!

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    Really like this and how it gives me that bit of humor…still not right in how it sings.

    below I've put in parenthesis the extra syllables and in the second line you need one more. there's a way to do this!! But I want you to figure it out.

    Make it conversational…just like you'd say it. Lots to think about!

    well I could show (you) a map
    Dr…

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    Really like this and how it gives me that bit of humor…still not right in how it sings.

    below I've put in parenthesis the extra syllables and in the second line you need one more. there's a way to do this!! But I want you to figure it out.

    Make it conversational…just like you'd say it. Lots to think about!

    well I could show (you) a map
    Draw you (-) a picture
    Read the facts
    Line by line
    (but in) stead of that
    How about (we have) a real good time

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