Posted April 30, 2019 by Patricia Aubin & filed under .
Ok, I will resubmit more ideas to be sure. Thanks again for your help.. Love your music btw. Really great. 🙂
Hi Patricia. I just saw your modifications. I think the problem she was having with it was that “sometimes…” is a mouthful. You might have a listen to the video again, but that was my take. Just two cents.
I think the comment section would be sufficient, but to be sure, I think I’d say it in a post as well. Being sure is never a bad thing!
Hi Keith, I did resubmit but didn't write that note. Can I do that in the comment section or it has to be in the post?
Forgot to tell you to resubmit whatever you decide you like best and note that it is a change that Beth suggested. You may have already done that, but thought I’d say it anyway. Congratulations!
Absolutely. Great work!
I like when I see (or when I feel) the truth so clear… the shine word is hard to say right after truth… Thanks so much, I'm submitting some lines now.. 😊👌👍
Just a few more for ya. Enjoy working the line to your satisfaction!
“But anytime the truth’s so near”“When I find the truth so clear”“When I see the truth so clear”
No problem. I’ll keep thinking about them. Take all the inputs you get and put together what works best for you. Hate to sound cliche, but it’s your truth!
Thanks, will do..! And please feel free to share your ideas of changes for that line. I've seen a few suggestions already. I appreciate that you offered them though, very considerate of you. 😊👍
I believe that you get credit for that. Check with Meredith to be sure. Email firstname.lastname@example.org and ask them to put your mind at ease. Welcome to the community!
Hi Keith, that's very kind of you. I'm new in the songwriting community and I'm a little confused right now. My lines disappeared. I think Beth might have used only the word "truth". She wrote this line. I wrote "Everytime I follow my truth". Do I get the credit anyway? Just want to make sure it's not a mistake…
Hi Patricia, Beth suggested that the line may need to be easier to sing. I had some ideas so I thought I’d pass them along. All yours if you want them, pass on them if not. Congratulations on your selection!:
Ideas for: Sometimes when the truth shines clear “Anytime the truth shines clear” “When I see the truth shine clear” “When I feel the truth this near” “When I see the truth shine clear” “When I know it’s truth this near” “If I see the truth shine clear” Mostly the same idea, just a bit less of a mouth full.
Thanks Kevin, this song is incredibly close to what I'm experiencing so I'm really feeling it..
Patricia, filled with emotion. Real. ☺