Marti Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Big hugs to you..I'm seeing many of us echoing a similar sentiment, let's let the writing heal us. Prayers for you!
"
"You’ve always been there beside me(Marti your video really got to me. I’m going thru the same horrible experience with my dad right now. Sending you love and prayers.)"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Still I'm a stickler for not having too many syllables! But I like your fresh words...here's a way to fit better:
The truth is gonna rock my soul
Even as I try to walk away
Burning like a red hot coal
Making all my reasons richochet
or better still?
The truth is gonna rock my soul
Making all my reasons richochet
Burning like a red hot coal
Everytime I try to walk away
then I'd try to turn it around to see if it's better like this:
The truth is gonna rock your soul
Making all your reasons richochet
Burning like a red hot coal
Everytime you try to walk away
"
"Even when I try to walk away/even when I try to let it go/it comes back like a red hot ricochet/burning like the passion in my soul"
Clay Mills commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"nice thought. We need to keep the rhyme scheme the same as the first verse."
(more)"I was lucky/to have someone/who made it hard to say goodbye"
"Let’s take it real slow, savor every sweet kiss/cuz baby it doesn’t get better than this!"
Gary Lucas commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Good line but might not scan over the implied rhythm "
(more)"My head’s spins at a frenetic pace/trying to keep up in life’s rat race"
Marti Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Big hugs to you..I'm seeing many of us echoing a similar sentiment, let's let the writing heal us. Prayers for you!
"
"You’ve always been there beside me(Marti your video really got to me. I’m going thru the same horrible experience with my dad right now. Sending you love and prayers.)"
Marti Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Big hugs to you..I'm seeing many of us echoing a similar sentiment, let's let the writing heal us. Prayers for you!
"
"You’ve always been there beside me(Marti your video really got to me. I’m going thru the same horrible experience with my dad right now. Sending you love and prayers.)"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Still I'm a stickler for not having too many syllables! But I like your fresh words...here's a way to fit better:
The truth is gonna rock my soul
Even as I try to walk away
Burning like a red hot coal
Making all my reasons richochet
or better still?
The truth is gonna rock my soul
Making all my reasons richochet
Burning like a red hot coal
Everytime I try to walk away
then I'd try to turn it around to see if it's better like this:
The truth is gonna rock your soul
Making all your reasons richochet
Burning like a red hot coal
Everytime you try to walk away
"
"Even when I try to walk away/even when I try to let it go/it comes back like a red hot ricochet/burning like the passion in my soul"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"I LOVE the "yes me" idea...you don't have to explain it in the second line..."
(more)"Well I could find someone who always wants to yes-me/nod their head pretend everything’s fine/but you’re the only one who really really gets me/but I’m...never gonna change your mind"
Clay Mills commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"nice thought. We need to keep the rhyme scheme the same as the first verse."
(more)"I was lucky/to have someone/who made it hard to say goodbye"
"Let’s take it real slow, savor every sweet kiss/cuz baby it doesn’t get better than this!"
"Can’t fake what we’re feeling/it’s so real and so true/it’s just me being me and you being you"
"Words can’t define/the magic we share/is blowing my mind"
Marty Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"This is great. Might be even stronger to say "Can"t believe, God sent me". Good work!"
(more)"Can't believe/ God sent me"
Marty Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"This is outstanding. Points right to the title!"
(more)"Stars align/when you find"
"Life is sweet/when you meet..."
Marty Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Very creative line. I wasn"t picturing her in sweats and tennis shoes, but I"ll think on this. Maybe the most obvious is not the way to go. "
(more)"You’re super sexy in your sweats and high tops/don’t need Versace to make my heart stop"
Marty Dodson commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"This is a great opening line! Strong contender!"
(more)"I wanna hold you too close and a little too tight/I wanna kiss you too hard too many times tonight"
"Sipping champaign in a suite at the Ritz/nothing on but a robe and Netflix"
"Three little words that stop you in your tracks/and it kills you inside cuz there’s no turning back"
Chris Barron commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"monkey wrenching my busted heart /trying to pry my life apart"
(more)"I'm upside down, inside out/still trying to figure what my life's about"
"Binge on Game of Thrones when I'm bored/I don't wear a crown but you can call me m'lord!"
"Binge on Game of Thrones when I'm bored/I don't wear a crown but you can call me m'lord!"
Brad Roberts commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"your best one so far. this is a winner i think!"
(more)"He buckled his seatbelt and held on tight/ And closed his eyes while the drone took flight"
"But fear not boys and girls Santa always comes through/with presents of love made just for you"
Brad Roberts commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"by the way, i think this could work towards the end of the song, but right now i think that maybe its too soon to quickly resolve santa's blues like this..."
(more)"But fear not boys and girls Santa always comes through/with presents of love made just for you"
"Since his wife left he lives all alone/he'd like to retire and be replaced by a drone"
"He rides in the sky, Rudolph leads the way/but it might be time for a GPS in the sleigh"
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Gary Lucas commented on rsmithline's lyric:
"Good line but might not scan over the implied rhythm "
(more)"My head’s spins at a frenetic pace/trying to keep up in life’s rat race"