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"In the depths of the pain, on the brink of insane, we reach for the pulse in our hearts"
Marti Dodson commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"Hi MariaJack! I think I understand what you're saying-I use this technique sometimes but often place it in the bridge since the chorus that comes next is broken down a lot of the time!"
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"If I see tomorrow, I will leave my sorrow... ( a beat/pause here and then goes down) Behind / (three beats to pick it back up) And I'll say the... (I'm pausing for a second here and going to a lower key on "behind" for affect. I think it gives the last chorus something a bit different and lifts the chorus even higher going in.) ? Confusing?"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"GOOD phrasing...but many many unanswered questions:
Yeah I could call you out, (GOOD)
show you by the numbers
(show me what?)
Scream and shout, ( GOOD)
beg you to try (try what?)
With no doubt,
I could make you wonder why
(make me wonder why what?)
But I’m never gonna change your mind
GREAT on phrasing and great pictures...just needs to be conversational and airtight. Meaningwise this is still porous....!!"
"Yeah I could call you out, show you by the numbers / Scream and shout, beg you to try / With no doubt, I could make you wonder why / But I'm never gonna change your mind"
"In the depths of the pain, on the brink of insane, we reach for the pulse in our hearts"
Marti Dodson commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"Hi MariaJack! I think I understand what you're saying-I use this technique sometimes but often place it in the bridge since the chorus that comes next is broken down a lot of the time!"
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"If I see tomorrow, I will leave my sorrow... ( a beat/pause here and then goes down) Behind / (three beats to pick it back up) And I'll say the... (I'm pausing for a second here and going to a lower key on "behind" for affect. I think it gives the last chorus something a bit different and lifts the chorus even higher going in.) ? Confusing?"
Marti Dodson commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"I like 'meet tomorrow'-unique turn of phrase!
"
"Every heartbeat reminds me / of all that's behind me / But I'll meet tomorrow without any sorrow knowing you're here by my side"
Marti Dodson commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"I like 'meet tomorrow'-unique turn of phrase!
"
"Every heartbeat reminds me / of all that's behind me / But I'll meet tomorrow without any sorrow knowing you're here by my side"
"The past is behind me / I'll meet every tomorrow without any sorrow weighing my happiness (or tenderness) down"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"GOOD phrasing...but many many unanswered questions:
Yeah I could call you out, (GOOD)
show you by the numbers
(show me what?)
Scream and shout, ( GOOD)
beg you to try (try what?)
With no doubt,
I could make you wonder why
(make me wonder why what?)
But I’m never gonna change your mind
GREAT on phrasing and great pictures...just needs to be conversational and airtight. Meaningwise this is still porous....!!"
"Yeah I could call you out, show you by the numbers / Scream and shout, beg you to try / With no doubt, I could make you wonder why / But I'm never gonna change your mind"
"Yeah I can call you out, show you all the numbers / Scream and shout, point out all the lies / With no doubt, pull those ideas under with time / But I'm never gonna change your mind"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"applying vocal modulation can be a good thing in small creative ways if the seams of the lyric don't feel pulled over the melody. it should roll right off your tongue."
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"You say I’m never gonna change your mind / With your feet firm on the ground / But if the moon can turn the tide / Baby you can turn around (When I sing this, applying vocal modulation (?) it is 10/9 10/9 - O-N and GROU-OUND - TUR-URN and TI-IDE - TUR-URN and AH-ROU-OUND.)"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"Glad you mentioned "ruffles" Maria! It depends on the individual melody and the phrasing but in general I'm pretty strict about fitting over the melody without pulling the seams of the lyrics to do it. The lyric should be a beautiful well fitting piece of clothing fitting over the body of the melody with no puckering seams!"
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"You say I'm never gonna change your mind / But there's something you should know / If the moon can turn the tide / There's no telling where the wind might blow ( I know the syllables are sketchy but I'm singing MOON and the end of TURN with what I technically call "ruffles" which to me, gives those words an extra syllable.) :)"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"ohh..like this...try it as the third line and have lines 2 & 4 rhyme"
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"You say I'm never gonna change your mind / But if the moon can change the tide"
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Gary Lucas commented on MariaJack's lyric:
"I know that feeling
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