pamby1

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  • Jack Tempchin
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Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"Nice line. Get my mind unraveled."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Might take a new exit, the road less travelled/Try to sort things out, get my mind unraveled"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"cool."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"And the future is ready to come undone/and the past just burns as it circles the sun"

Grace McLean commented on pamby1's lyric:

"lovely"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"The sunlight through the window, will reveal the dancing dust/When it shines upon your face, it shows the woman I trust"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"excellent"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Santa's mind raced as the drone took flight/Something about this wasn't quite right/He felt time racing, yet it also stood still/No explanation/Was he mentally ill?"

sylviatosun commented on pamby1's lyric:

"that's funny...i know the feeling...lol"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"So much for lifes journey, I'm stuck on a hamster wheel"

sashadobson commented on pamby1's lyric:

"cool and simple. Hey: how about using "they" instead of I. "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I hide the truths i want to forget"

Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"Nice line. Get my mind unraveled."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Might take a new exit, the road less travelled/Try to sort things out, get my mind unraveled"

Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"Nice line."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Might watch the sun go down, see the asphalt glisten/The road reveals secrets if you’re willing to listen"

Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"nice line!"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Might skip the baggage, it’s best to travel light/Let the answers unravel as day becomes night"

Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"good to include an image like this."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Grudges and regret, all they do is steal/Keeping you spinning, on life’s hamster wheel"

Jack Tempchin commented on pamby1's lyric:

"good thought"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I’d like to be the better man/But I don’t know where to begin"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"cool."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"And the future is ready to come undone/and the past just burns as it circles the sun"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"can we best *come undone*? it's in a lot of songs"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"And the future is ready to come undone/and the past just burns as it circles the sun"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"come unsung, "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"And the future is ready to come undone/and the past just burns as it circles the sun"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"unstrung"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"And the future is ready to come undone/and the past just burns as it circles the sun"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"the clocks are condemned/where the sky and the earth and my eye all end"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"All clocks are condemned/Where sky and earth meet and it is the end—I dare you"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"image!"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Broke but never spent/Where my dreams drift through dandelions dancing in the dew"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"cashier in the sky... what can we put in the sky that's more... i don't know. poetic? silver in the sky, cash in the sky (double meaning)"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Cashier in the sky/Cash or credit, how would you like to pay for that?"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"how did i never rhyme splinter with winter?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I'll get under your skin like a Brillo splinter/and stick around like an endless winter"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"black sheep, renegade, rogue, rapscallion/ knocked over soldier in the wrong battalion "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I’m a black sheep blue streak, last to the dance"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"you ARE a sweet talking dandy!"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A modern day Willy Wonka, sans the candy/but I've got the cane, I'm a sweet talking dandy"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"awwww..."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I use big words cuz I want to sound clever/Yet when I ask for a date they always say never"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i got an epic poem and a poison pen/a zen koan and a fistful of yen"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I can recite epic poems from start to end/Some people enjoy but most just pretend"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"how can you show that you're dejected rather than just say it?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Maybe it's the tape, that keeps my glasses connected/Those perpetual sneers leave me dejected"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"like the yellowing tape keeps my glasses dejected/the jeers and the sneers leave me disconnected"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Maybe it's the tape, that keeps my glasses connected/Those perpetual sneers leave me dejected"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"if you say that the glasses are dejected then it's interesting because you're personifying the glasses then if you say that you're disconnected, it's a physical thing that the hearer can picture..."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Maybe it's the tape, that keeps my glasses connected/Those perpetual sneers leave me dejected"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"like a bad check bouncing"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I'm like a bad check that you try to deposit/I always return like a skeleton in your closet"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"like a bad check bouncing"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I'm like a bad check that you try to deposit/I always return like a skeleton in your closet"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"my mind is a beast and my heart is a pest/i got too many dreams for my soul to digest"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"My mind keeps moving; but my body's at rest/Just way too many thoughts that I can't digest"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i'm living my life two steps ahead/i got a [something]shoe on my wooden leg"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I'm livin' life two steps ahead/If I don't slow down, I'll soon be dead"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"this is nice and gritty. could i scan a little better? "i closed my eyes for a couple of winks/my mind doesn't care and my body doesn't think"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I tried telling my eyes it was time for a couple of winks/But my mind doesn't give a rats ass what my body thinks"

Chris Barron commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i'd love to sleep in your deep, blue dress/i got an itchy palm and a second guess"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I would love to sleep but it would just bring me stress/ I've got this energy that I just can't suppress"

Grace McLean commented on pamby1's lyric:

"lovely"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"The sunlight through the window, will reveal the dancing dust/When it shines upon your face, it shows the woman I trust"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"excellent"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Santa's mind raced as the drone took flight/Something about this wasn't quite right/He felt time racing, yet it also stood still/No explanation/Was he mentally ill?"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"ho ho ho"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Santa was hoping that this was all just a dream/Or that he enjoyed, too much Harvey's Bristol Cream"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"LOVE mylanta and santa"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Now you've seen the past, but there is more in my bag of tricks/ Hold on tight my friend, welcome to the year two one one six/Let's get ready to land now, take these Tums and Mylanta/What you are about to see, is a world without Santa"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i like it alot"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Oh Bunny you sure have some great tricks up your sleeve/ And to think that I thought you were just make believe"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"killer last line"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Oh Bunny, this sight is just painful to bear/I don't recognize the man standing right there/Can you help me recover some of that time/I'm afraid I've aged like a cheap box of wine"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"really great"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Ah, those were the days, I was looking top shelf/So trim and so nimble, just like an elf!/The world was my oyster, no limits indeed!/On a mission of love, I knew I'd succeed!"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

""speaks up at last"? "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A voice from within the box speaks up at last / Fear not I'm the drone from a Christmases past"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"meredith and i tossed around using the idea of doing a Dickensian take on the drone. great minds thinking alike, clearly. we worried that it would become to slavishly close to the book, and sound like a rip off. then again, we might get some post-modern version of the "mock heroic" used so successfully by alexander pope in his "dunciad" and even more so in his "rape of the lock," the latter was an object of close scrutiny by me in my undergraduate years. i remember reading it aloud from beginning to end. took me well over an hour. but i was mesmerized by the iambic pentameter. it was in those days that i learned the nuance of meter, and they went a long way toward my songwriting--though that wasn't my intention at the time. "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A voice from within the box speaks up at last / Fear not I'm the drone from a Christmases past"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"meredith and i tossed around using the idea of doing a Dickensian take on the drone. great minds thinking alike, clearly. we worried that it would become to slavishly close to the book, and sound like a rip off. then again, we might get some post-modern version of the "mock heroic" used so successfully by alexander pope in his "dunciad" and even more so in his "rape of the lock," the latter was an object of close scrutiny by me in my undergraduate years. i remember reading it aloud from beginning to end. took me well over an hour. but i was mesmerized by the iambic pentameter. it was in those days that i learned the nuance of meter, and they went a long way toward my songwriting--though that wasn't my intention at the time. "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A voice from within the box speaks up at last / Fear not I'm the drone from a Christmases past"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"despite our doubts, though, it might 'parody' well, to use the noun as a verb."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A voice from within the box speaks up at last / Fear not I'm the drone from a Christmases past"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"who is gathered? i thought it was just santa and the ghost of xmas past?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A voice from the box left those gathered aghast/Fear not, I'm the drone from Christmases past"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"nice one pamby1"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"From inside the box rose two long fluffy ears/A bunny emerged to applause filled with cheers"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"its a good concept too, by the way."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"From inside the box rose two long fluffy ears/A bunny emerged to applause filled with cheers"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"fuck pappy van winkle!"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A box IN-side the DRONE made old SAN-ta’s eyes TWIN-kle, Could this be a bottle of Pappy Van Winkle?"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"inside of is redundant: two prepositions in a row. but the meter tempted you, didn't it pamby?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Inside of the box was a strange new device/That can instantly tell the naughty from nice"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"good rhyme"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Inside the box was a note penned in German/With strange demands from someone named Herman"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"use rhymezone.com for that?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Inside the box was a note penned in German/With strange demands from someone named Herman"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"this is good"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Santa perked at sight of this modern day sleigh/Thinking perhaps all toys should be sent this way"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i like the 'shock and awe' reference"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"The drone caused a shock, everyone was in awe/Poor Rudolph fainted at the site that he saw"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"awesome! great set up"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"A tabloid reporter has Santa on edge/he's making demands and an ominous pledge"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"nice"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"The tipping point came on a frigid fall day/He gathered the gang; he had something to say"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"good: flows nicely with your last two lines, more so than your other entries"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"His once bright garb now tattered and faded/And the man inside now broken and jaded"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"hahaha"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"He doesn't care about little Johnny's list/And little Jane's demands have left him quite pissed"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"He DOES not care ONE bit for POOR Johnny's LIST/ and YOUNG Jane's de-MANDS have, in FACT, left him PISSED"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"He doesn't care about little Johnny's list/And little Jane's demands have left him quite pissed"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"if not for the stupid back slashes this would look and read better, but you get the idea,--i'm redoing the line to make it more metrically symmetrical. "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"He doesn't care about little Johnny's list/And little Jane's demands have left him quite pissed"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"pretty fucking cool!"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"That jovial laugh that we all know so well/Now an unholy snicker from the depths of hell"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"i love this concept"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Living for years in the cold fierce North Pole / The seclusion has now taken its toll"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"my rewrite, just for meter: "Living for years in the cold fierce North Pole/Seclusion has finally taken it's toll. " "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Living for years in the cold fierce North Pole / The seclusion has now taken its toll"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"why did i have to google E F Hutton? am i the only one?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"He holds more power than kings and sheiks/ And EF Hutton listens when Santa speaks"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"a nice set up. this is a good direction. but you have another one i prefer. more later..."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Don't be fooled by that laugh or that smile/ His untold story is wicked and vile"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"you have style pamby. i can tell it's you without looking at the name."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Do not be fooled by eyes that twinkle/In his mind there is a warp and wrinkle"

Brad Roberts commented on pamby1's lyric:

"pappy van winkle and E F Hutton. what do you read, anyways?"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"Rosy red cheeks and eyes that twinkle/His madness fueled by Pappy Van Winkle"

sylviatosun commented on pamby1's lyric:

"that's funny...i know the feeling...lol"

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Lyric by pamby1:

"So much for lifes journey, I'm stuck on a hamster wheel"

sylviatosun commented on pamby1's lyric:

"good beginning rhyme...now finish the sentence and take me there..."

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I boarded the train with only a vision"

sashadobson commented on pamby1's lyric:

"cool and simple. Hey: how about using "they" instead of I. "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I hide the truths i want to forget"

sashadobson commented on pamby1's lyric:

"Right on!!! "

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Lyric by pamby1:

"I hide the truths i want to forget"

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