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jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I do like that first phrase. But I think the next line either needs to rhyme with hand or be a longer phrase to be able to end with a hand rhyme. Or sometimes it you use the path word, the ear wants to hear additional “ath” rhymes in a longer phrase to take the attention off of the news to hear a hand rhyme.
Ie...
Walk with you on this path even if you can’t come back...
But then you also have to consider that this last line writes into the words “missing things”
That’s a big order!!!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"Know you’re worth every tear Walk with you on this path"

Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like the story here...get a sense of who these people are...it's still in need of a few tweeks...

LOVE hard to hear...but what's hard to hear? So much stronger to be specific!

Here's another approach just inspired by a few snippets of what you wrote...notice how it fits perfectly with the melody with no extra syllables or accents in the wrong place...

"The truth has never lost to fear
It'll wait forever to be known
Till the moment that it all comes clear
Flowing like a river over stone"

or

"The truth is never lost in fear
It waits until it's moment to be known
Shining with it's light so clear
Flowing like a river over stone"

See how this opens us up to a whole new vista?? and we can go from this to the next section feeling like we really went somewhere...this is what I'm looking for.

"

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Lyric by TAM:

"For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I do like that first phrase. But I think the next line either needs to rhyme with hand or be a longer phrase to be able to end with a hand rhyme. Or sometimes it you use the path word, the ear wants to hear additional “ath” rhymes in a longer phrase to take the attention off of the news to hear a hand rhyme.
Ie...
Walk with you on this path even if you can’t come back...
But then you also have to consider that this last line writes into the words “missing things”
That’s a big order!!!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"Know you’re worth every tear Walk with you on this path"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"If you put that line on the chorus, it could work too as part of a bigger line that incorporates internal rhymed with “tear”"

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Lyric by TAM:

"Know you’re worth every tear Walk with you on this path"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"The lift melody can change if need be. I like this angle. Are you saying that he is afraid of missing things in general or
Afraid of missing moments that his mom is clear and they’re able to connect? If it’s the latter, that’s another way of using missing things which could be good.

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Lyric by TAM:

"Fill every moment with love / Even if it’s forgotten again / I’m afraid of missing things …"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"And if it’s the latter, when his mom is “clear” what’s that like? What would she do to let him know she’s there? We just heard the lyrics:
But I can only watch you go
So I just want to hold your hand
(Wait for you to break through again)
-But how can that be described?"

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"Fill every moment with love / Even if it’s forgotten again / I’m afraid of missing things …"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Don’t worry about extra beats or even words. When It comes to the end of a line like this Chris can tweak melody. In this case the line is more important.
I wasn’t suggesting replacing what you sent already but you could. Whatever it takes to dig in to that emotion. I like “and when the real you shines (breaks) through... “ just not sure yet "

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Lyric by TAM:

"Fill every moment with love / Even if it’s forgotten again / I’m afraid of missing things …"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like this idea. I think it was you who said that you try to concentrate on the minutes or days that are good because it can change so fast... so you live for those times. "

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"In the time I have left with you,"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"It might be a line for later in the section... I think this section needs a set up line first before a thought like that "

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"In the time I have left with you,"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Like the line that you have here"

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Lyric by TAM:

"In the time I have left with you,"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like this as it leaves room for somethings else because you say “even if”. "

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Lyric by TAM:

"Even if you seem far away …"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Yes and that’s exactly what a line like that does!!!"

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"Even if you seem far away …"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Really sweet. Every tear that you dried... every time you forgave. Those are awesome."

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"Every laugh that we shared/ every smile that you gave/ every tear that you dried/ every time you forgave me"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"This is your best TAM! Wow."

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"Every laugh that we shared/ every smile that you gave/ every tear that you dried/ every time you forgave me"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like this but I loved the “every” in there. Words that repeat like that give the listener that extra reason to pay attention because it’s usually something emotional that follows. So you did that naturally!! The thanking her is truly a nice thought but I feel that is a resolution thought that would come
closer to the end."

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Lyric by TAM:

"The sound of your laugh, those times you were brave / every tear that you dried, every time you forgave"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I think these ARE missing things. I’ve been looking more for emotions more than actual memories. We’ve covered a few memories in the verse and we have a chance to maybe do more after this bridge... but for the bridge we’re looking for real heart felt emotion."

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"The parent you were, a talk without tears / an easier time without so much fear / What I’d give … to have it all back today, today"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"You are on the right track with not giving specific memories... but just things about the mother the son will miss."

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"The parent you were, a talk without tears / an easier time without so much fear / What I’d give … to have it all back today, today"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Yes I get cha! The things when life was normal. That’s exactly what I’m looking for! "

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Lyric by TAM:

"The parent you were, a talk without tears / an easier time without so much fear / What I’d give … to have it all back today, today"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like this idea of staying in the moment. Maybe that is a good angle for bridge. Hmmm"

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Lyric by TAM:

"Rather than focus on memories I’ll miss / I’ll stay in this moment, try hard to not live / in the past … or live the pain ahead. / Instead of …. missing things"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like coconut pies. It is a real thing that he would miss! Keep going! You’ve dealt with this or are dealing with it so pull up all your emotions. You’re doing so great!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"Your hugs, your advice / your coconut pies / your stories about GRAMma / and holding your hand"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"This is so conversational and real! Good job!!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"I remember us talking that one night, til 3am About college and girls, Memories and life, and friends"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Proud of you!!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"I remember us talking that one night, til 3am About college and girls, Memories and life, and friends"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"My absolute pleasure!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"I remember us talking that one night, til 3am About college and girls, Memories and life, and friends"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Cool thoughts"

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Lyric by TAM:

"I remember you showed me — how you could — still be strong, When as a young widow —you felt life had done — you wrong."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"These are really nice thoughts. And you're doing great with writing to melody! I feel like this might be more of a bridge thought. It's a "resolution" type thought. Verse two is still letting the story unfold... ie.. his memories of his mom since it's going back into the chorus which is him now saying "I'm missing things". Bridges in a song are a fantastic place to add another thought about the situation and what you've written here is him saying "I'll love you always" and that's more of a resolution thought."

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Lyric by TAM:

"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Love all these thoughts!’ I think there’s a place for those thoughts in this song. I think we are going to have a lot of thoughtful stuff for the bridge. Very powerful!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I think I totally understand. It’s such a great reminder to live in THE moment because the next moment or later that day she might not remember. It’s such a powerful thought,"

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"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"If you try to word it in a way that isn’t like a “lyric” or poem, sometimes the emotion strikes so much deeper. How you would say it to another person getting ready to experience what you already have gone through might be the way to go. Forget trying to be creative with it. Just speak. And then deal with putting those honest thoughts into song form. But first just write the thought. That’s what will hit the heart."

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Lyric by TAM:

"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I hope it’s helpful in some way. But keep in mind we are crafting in a specific way although I think good song craft transcends genres. But country craft is very conversational and unlike some other genres, it doesn’t leave much for interpretation, it’s so challenging."

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Lyric by TAM:

"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I’ll talk with you as much as you want!! As far as getting the thought into the needed structure... I know it can be hard. It definitely takes practice. I’m glad you start with your basic thoughts! Just even a sentence of what you’re trying to express... not a lyric yet.. just a sentence. Just keep reminding yourself of that basic thought and don’t try to be too clever with it, Know the rhyme that you’re shooting for and see what word has that rhyme but is descriptive somehow of your basic thought. If you’re trying to express the need to live in the moment because your mom may not remember it in the following moments, then make that your “basic thought”. Above you said “ all you can do is to try to create moments of joy or love that day -- and often by the end of that same day, she's already forgotten those very moments even happened. But they did happen. And that love happened in those moments,”
“Moment” is a word that is in there, Also “create, love, forgotten”... try picking one of those words and write a line beginning or ending with it. What you wrote that I just quoted is SO good and I FEEL that so much more than lines trying too hard. Get the thought down first and worry about the rhyme later. Not sure if that is helping or not but feel free to ask me anything!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Great job syncing this with melody! Nice images too!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"I remember the way you / would welcome / in all my friends. “Always room for one more / at our table and hearth,”/ you said."

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Nice thoughts TAM. Might be helpful to go back to listen to Chris's melody of verse one because we are trying our best to match it. ie.. this fits better:
verse 1 "I remember you crying-- that one night --at 3am"
verse 2 "I try to take moments--and hold each--one in my heart
Does this make sense? "

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"I try to make moments to hold in our hearts / even if they are gone like the flash of a falling star"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like “I‘m not that strong” ... it’s emotional "

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"I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The hills are too steep, the valleys too deep / I’m not that strong"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Interesting. I like that lead in “you’re here with me but I’m missing things!"

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"There’s fear in your eyes, I can see Like the end of a song, till the music is gone You’re here with me … (but I’m missing things)"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Ah, The fact that this hits home makes it very real. "

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Lyric by TAM:

"Someday soon all I know will be gone The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine You’re here with me (but I’m missing things)"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like the line “all I know will be gone” and “you’re here with me” "

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"In my mind I know something is wrong My heart feels It won’t be too long, all I know will be gone You’re here with me…but (I’m missing things)"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"Ah TAM so sorry you are going through something similar. I wish you the best with that situation. I like the idea of each other being able to see the fear or pain in each other’s eyes. That’s moving."

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"But the one thing I clearly see Is the fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine—it’s killin’ me"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"This is interesting. Both people could say that about each other which enables the chorus to keep the same words but the perspective changes based on who is saying them. I like your internal rhymes on eyes and mine! I am wondering how the first line could be with a rhyme or even a soft rhyme to “things” ie... memories, everything ,etc...
Good job!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"And it’s makin me scared The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine. We’re aware … (I’m missing things)"

jaynesachs commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like the concept of being further and further away!"

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Lyric by TAM:

"And I’m so afraid. Each time we’re together you’re further and further away"

Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on TAM's lyric:

"I like the story here...get a sense of who these people are...it's still in need of a few tweeks...

LOVE hard to hear...but what's hard to hear? So much stronger to be specific!

Here's another approach just inspired by a few snippets of what you wrote...notice how it fits perfectly with the melody with no extra syllables or accents in the wrong place...

"The truth has never lost to fear
It'll wait forever to be known
Till the moment that it all comes clear
Flowing like a river over stone"

or

"The truth is never lost in fear
It waits until it's moment to be known
Shining with it's light so clear
Flowing like a river over stone"

See how this opens us up to a whole new vista?? and we can go from this to the next section feeling like we really went somewhere...this is what I'm looking for.

"

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Lyric by TAM:

"For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed"

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hookist my lyrics written
  • Jayne Sachs & Chris Robbins
  • The Great Gary Lucas
  • Marti Dodson
  • Beth Nielsen Chapman
let you know that you’re not alone, / walk this path that we never planned / and help you through the missing things (Patricia) I'll be there for everything (Merilee / Jayne)
Know you’re worth every tear Walk with you on this path
Let you know that you’re not alone So when the real you breaks through again I won’t be missing things
And when the real, true you breaks through Show I love you all that I can
I used to be your little boy Now I’m your man
if you forget the time we have / the love will last / (So when I’m missing things it won’t be everything…)
because all of the love I share / is real, even if you forget / But I’ll still be missing things …
Fill every moment with love / Even if it’s forgotten again / I’m afraid of missing things …
Grab every moment, so/ I can fill it with all the love I have/ ‘Cause I know I’ll be missing things…
I can make you feel less alone/ Give you all of the love I can/ ‘Cause I know I’ll be missing things…
Let you know that you’re not alone / Give you all of the love I can
We won’t walk this road alone/ I’ll be with you every moment we have
Don’t dare to miss one more thing
I don’t dare miss one more thing
The best thing that I can do …
But now there’s no time to waste
But the truth is, right here, right now —
If today I can make you smile,
If I can bring you some joy today
What can I do right now?
I want to take care of you
Forgotten does not mean gone
Precious time that I have with you …
In the time I have left with you,
With the time that I have today,
Even if you seem far away …
Every laugh that we shared/ every smile that you gave/ every tear that you dried/ every time you forgave me
The sound of your laugh, those times you were brave / every tear that you dried, every time you forgave
Every hug, your advice, every laugh and your eyes / every smile and your walk, every late – night talk / Every thing / Thank you for everything
The parent you were, a talk without tears / an easier time without so much fear / What I’d give … to have it all back today, today
Like your pose when you smile, how you laugh at yourself / the way that you mix up the jokes that you tell / and your smile / when you would catch my eye / that’s why (I’m missing things)
Forget about all the moments I’ll miss / I’ll stay here and now, give you one little kiss / And not think … about what lies ahead … don’t want to be / Missing things
I try not to focus on when you’ll be gone / And the change that I see when that sundown comes / And the pain … of what might lie ahead … let go of / Missing things
When I think about all / I’ll miss when you’re gone / it hurts too much / the list is too long. / And I’ll miss …the moments we have to love … today. Don’t want to be Missing Things, because they’re everything …
Rather than focus on memories I’ll miss / I’ll stay in this moment, try hard to not live / in the past … or live the pain ahead. / Instead of …. missing things
The stories you tell, how you laugh at yourself / the way that you dance when I’m holding your hand / Most of all … I won’t forget moments of … your love
The stories you tell, how you laugh at yourself The walks that we take, our swims at the lake In your eyes … the tears as we take our time … with goodbye
You humming along, as I sing you your song (Or play you your song)
Your hugs, your advice / Your laugh and your eyes / The way that you dance / and holding your hand / And your love — But this will never end / our love
Your hugs, your advice / your coconut pies / your stories about GRAMma / and holding your hand
I remember us talking that one night, til 3am About college and girls, Memories and life, and friends
I remember the way we’d stay up late, til 2am / Talking bout college and neighbors, and girls, and friends.
I remember the way we would stay up late at night Talking bout mem’ries and Friends, and school, and life
I remember you showed me — how you could — still be strong, When as a young widow —you felt life had done — you wrong.
I remember the way that you showed me how to live When life was its hardest — at least we sure thought it was then
No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart. But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart. If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way. Our love / will / stay.
I remember the way you / would welcome / in all my friends. “Always room for one more / at our table and hearth,”/ you said.
I try to make moments to hold in our hearts / even if they are gone like the flash of a falling star
I remember you dancing around the room with Dad / When he passed away, we cried and you held my hand
You danced with your true love around the kitchen floor / Held my hand as I cried when Dad wasn’t there anymore
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The hills are too steep, the valleys too deep / I’m not that strong
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The hills are too steep / I don’t have what it takes to be strong
I want off this ride that we’re on / The twists and the turns are too rough / And I’m sure this must be wrong
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The twists and the turns are too rough / and I’m not sure that I’m that strong
I wish I could wake every day Rewind and not know that this darkness will steal you away
I wish I could wake every day not knowing this darkness Is trying to steal you away
There’s fear in your eyes, I can see Like the end of a song, till the music is gone You’re here with me … (but I’m missing things)
Someday soon all I know will be gone The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine You’re here with me (but I’m missing things)
In my mind I know something is wrong My heart feels It won’t be too long, all I know will be gone You’re here with me…but (I’m missing things)
But the one thing I clearly see Is the fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine—it’s killin’ me
And it’s makin me scared The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine. We’re aware … (I’m missing things)
And I’m so afraid. Each time we’re together you’re further and further away
We close our eyes and breathe / Our fingers interlace/ Stolen moments heal / little gifts of grace
Hate causes hate / Only love can heal / We attend to our wounds, take a breath, start to feel
Hate causes hate / only love can heal / Attend to your wounds / you’ll remember how to feel
So the choice is mine / if I fall, I’ll rise
So the choice is mine / broken wings can fly
So the choice is mine / wake each day and fly
Face to face / move a little closer / Step by Step (John Lee) / unsure what we’ll find / Side by side / the view will be worth the climb...but I’m never gonna change your mind.
Face to face / (we) inch a little close / Round a bend / (that’s a BIG surprise) / (It’s) one steep hill / but the view will be worth the climb / Still I’m never gonna change your mind! (Or “Step by step” for “It’s one steep hill”)
Inch by inch / we move ahead together / Step by step / unsure what we’ll find / It’s one steep hill / and the VIEW will be WORTH the CLIMB...but I’m never gonna change your mind
Face to face / move a little closer / Make a turn / unsure what we’ll find / Step by step (JohnLee) / the VIEW will be WORTH the CLIMB...But I’m never gonna change your mind
We weave our web / twistin and a-turnin / So entwined (KeithCurtis) / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) (two counts on ties) / We raise our heads / and look each other in the eye / Still I’m never gonna change your mind!
In the end / here we are together / A spider’s web / with ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / And like our lives / we’ll always be intertwined / But I’m never gonna change your mind
So we weave our web / really in a tangle / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / grow and entwine / I shake my head / and breathe a great big sigh / ‘Cause I’m never gonna change your mind
So we weave our web / gettin in a tangle / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / grow and entwine / You know tight knots / are always the strongest kind / But I’m never gonna change your mind
But this goes both ways / Try so hard to listen / (I) think and pray / Look to above / The reasons clear / listening is a way to love / (or “listening is an act of love*) / But I’m never gonna change your mind
a tiny little spark
(A) glimmer of a hope / flicker of a light ... (Apologies if this has been said; so many of us are attracted to the same words! Like moths to flickers of light!)
(a) casual remark / quiet little light / grows until it sparks / the notion that I might / Might just / Might be right
One of my remarks / shines a little light / This could be the start / the notion that I might / might just / might be right
One of my remarks / echoes in the night / this could be the start / the notion that I might / might just / might be right
You may feel a spark / You may see a light /Could be a fresh start / the notion that I might....
I’m throwing this to the hookist universe: I have a Line 3 I kinda like, but I haven’t fgured out how to lead up to it. “Like climbing vines, we’re so intertwined / But I’m never gonna change your mind.”
(Yeah) it’s hard to feel / we’re wearing armor / an iron shield / is one way to hide / but lets be real / no matter what I try ... I’m never gonna change your mind
So I try to feel, take off the armor / the iron shield I’m hiding behind / show your heart, and I will show you mine ... still I’m never gonna change your mind
Yeah we're living in a world of fear
Well another voice is hard to hear / It hurts to think our hearts have closed / But maybe hope can heal the fear / That you don’t mind when we feel so opposed
Well, I’m not afraid to make some waves / I’ll keep speaking out loud and clear / But if I let love lead the way / Maybe you will find a way to hear
Well, I’m not ashamed of making waves / And I know my voice will drown out any fear / You said there’s so much more to being brave / Than being the only sound than anyone can hear <I>
Well, another voice is hard to hear / I worry that our weary hearts have closed / I can’t go on and live in fear / Don’t like knowing that we’re feeling so opposed (Or: … feeling so alone) Resubmit with edits from Beth’s input
We can’t feel much if we’re wearing armor / We can’t hear much if our hearts are closed / We can’t think much if our minds are made up / I’m not in favor of being opposed
For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed

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