Lawrence Dean
Lawrence Dean
Lawrence Dean
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on LawrenceDean1959's lyric:
"Ha Ha Ha....is this meant for me? Just kidding!
this is a song about a relationship--not necessarily romantic....not sure writing about writing a song as an analogy is the strongest way....but it's creative!"
"Well, I could take your song/Sing it right back at you/Show what's wrong (with) ev'ry single line/'fore too long I'm sure we'd hit that awful rhyme/Still, I'm never gonna change your mind"
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on LawrenceDean1959's lyric:
"here we have to stretch "set" across 2 notes. I feel like that's pulling at the seams of the melody.
look how much better this sings:
I'm never gonna change your mind
Baby its as solid as a stone
You could also try
It might as well be solid as a stone
although that's a bit more cumbersome...but it could work.
play with options around those first four syllables:
- - - - solid as a stone
in a situation like this I write 20 or 30 options. this really strengthens the songwriting muscles!!"
"Well, I'm never gonna change your mind/It might just as well be set in stone"
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Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on LawrenceDean1959's lyric:
"Ha Ha Ha....is this meant for me? Just kidding!
(more)this is a song about a relationship--not necessarily romantic....not sure writing about writing a song as an analogy is the strongest way....but it's creative!"
"Well, I could take your song/Sing it right back at you/Show what's wrong (with) ev'ry single line/'fore too long I'm sure we'd hit that awful rhyme/Still, I'm never gonna change your mind"