Robert S. Hall

Robert S. Hall

Username: belzar

Robert S. Hall

Username: belzar
Littcarr, KY
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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"excellent"

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Lyric by belzar:

"The walkway is wet, the ground turned to mud. My heart feels at home while fear chill's my blood."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"excellent"

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Lyric by belzar:

"The walkway is wet, the ground turned to mud. My heart feels at home while fear chill's my blood."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"and well done, too!"

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Lyric by belzar:

"The moment was surreal, a foggy dream. Familiar face which I have never seen."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"your use of approximate rhyme reminds me of Emily Dickinson, one of America's greatest 19th century poets. She almost never left her house, preffering to read and write alone. Her poems were barely published before she died. Check her out if you are interested."

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Lyric by belzar:

"A feeling found within, a bold recollect. Like brazen summer winds, seen, never felt."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

""Surreal the moment, foggy dream akin. A distant thought recalled, a past recollection." Robert S Hall Robert: thanks as always for your submission. You are always to thoughtful, and you are developing a nice clear voice. There are two things I want to note about this particular effort: first, "don't tell me, show me." This is an old adage in creative writing, but it bears repeating. In other words, show me a dream - give me an image; otherwise the lines remain in the abstract. Secondly, as I mentioned to Todd, try not to write the words in an order that is contrary to the normal flow of speech. When you write "Surreal the moment, foggy the dream akin." Instead, try "The moment was surreal, a foggy dream" This has the same number of syllable as your line, and says the same thing, while remaining in iambic pentameter. Most of all though, thanks for this renewed effort at your approach. I appreciate your thoughtfulness. "

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Lyric by belzar:

"Surreal the moment, foggy dream akin. A distant thought recalled, a past recollection."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"robert, i like both of your last submissions. consider your line lengths, however - these are too long; its hard to fit 15 syllables into a couple of bars of music. try for 10. thanks for playing!"

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Lyric by belzar:

"Reaching out with celestial hands in hopes to gain a friend. Only silent desolation to find us in the end."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"first line is particularly good."

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Lyric by belzar:

"Eyes set on the future, the past upon our brow. The time to act has come and gone, what options have we now?"

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"this is a very cool idea."

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Lyric by belzar:

"We reach to the stars among celestial shores. With hyperactive drives and warp-enabled oars."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"good one. nice."

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Lyric by belzar:

"Our past written in stone, too late for sad regrets. The time grows near for a celestial reset."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"i'm not sure if the expression 'written in stone' sounds in keeping with the word 'reset' "

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Lyric by belzar:

"Our past written in stone, too late for sad regrets. The time grows near for a celestial reset."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"i like that this is dark, but i don't think it rings quite true. i think children are so innocent that they don't become hopeless in the way an adult does. however, i may be dead wrong. anybody? "

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Lyric by belzar:

"The atmosphere polluted, all resources ran dry. Inevitable dilemma, our hopeless children cry."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"this is really great. the only thing i question is the word 'retribution'. is that what you really mean? why do we want vengance?"

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Lyric by belzar:

"Our deeds placed in motion, no need for retrospect. A time for retribution, a cure for our neglect."

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Brad Roberts commented on belzar's lyric:

"nice one, robert."

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Lyric by belzar:

"Now I lay me down to sleep, strange dreamworks fill my head, tomorrow comes another day, such hope is often said."

Song Stats

My Lyrics

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  • Brad Roberts
  • Brad Roberts
Faithful comrad, always blameless / Ceaseless echo, future aimless
Faulty thoughts leave me remanded/ (to) repeating dreams, a life abandoned
Battle of wills within my head/ Nothing settled and nothing said
Reality Check: Well, we are off to the hospital to have a baby. My presence here will be intermittent at best. In case I don't get the chance to return before the song ends, I'd like to say how much of a pleasure it has been perticipating in this initial release of hookist. I'd also like to thank Brad for taking the time to not only read over our lines but in giving such great critical feedback. Hope to see you soon. -- Robert
A story from my past and simply writ/ A book about my life without me in it
A tale of me that never came to be/ A movie filmed and paused eternally
Hookist is great, Brad is paving the way. Sadly I'll be out of town for a day.
A battle of the wills among the crowd/ A figure moves toward me unavowed
A twisted tale that weaves an evil spell/ The rightful prelude to my private hell.
Before me she stands, disheveled and wet. A recognized face but we've never met.
Before me I see what has come and gone. Behind me I fear is tomorrow's dawn.
In the glimpse of an eye nothing is seen. The past meets present and all that's between.
The smell of rain, a flash of light / The scene is lit, turns back to night
The walkway is wet, the ground turned to mud. My heart feels at home while fear chill's my blood.
City lights break through the mist and the rain. A stark reminder of long ago pain.
I see myself disheveled, downtrodden. A former life lived but now forgotten?
The smell of fresh rain, a flash of bright light. Uneasiness abounds, and spreads through the night.
The moment was surreal, a foggy dream. Familiar face which I have never seen.
My senses gone amuck, both false and real. Absurd, the catalyst, though false, revealed.
My senses gone amuck, both false and real. Absurd the catalyst, falsely strong, revealed.
A feeling found within, a bold recollect. Like brazen summer winds, seen, never felt.
A distant memory tapped, elusive in thought. Like an age-old ingredient and a never used pot.
A distant memory tapped, elusive in thought. Like age-old ingredient and a never used pot.
A deed done new, remembered old again. A dream that's recognized, faintly found within.
Surreal the moment, foggy dream akin. A distant thought recalled, a past recollection.
Song topic: Something pirate themed... Arrr...
Song topic: Something nautical (Ocean, waves, water, etc...)
Song topic: Let's actually do one based in space this time... :}
Whispering Voices
Evolutionary Ambivalence
Mystic Evolution
Darwin's Enigma
Cosmic Teaspoons
The Jig Is Up
Gas Clumps
The withered Earth behind us, we shot into space. Did we sing our final chorus or save the human race?
The oceans start to boil, the skies begin to burn. A judgement placed upon us, a final lesson learned.
Satellites in space, we are the fallen stars. The modern human race, nothing left but scars.
Devils found among us, demons we awoke.Thrust upon our children, is this our final joke?
Eyes set on the future, the past upon our brow.Unto trusted children, have we nothing left to vow?
No remedy within, we reached for the stars. A doomed Earth behind us, we aimed to conquer mars.
Reaching out with celestial hands in hopes to gain a friend. Only silent desolation to find us in the end.
Speeding through the universe like a stone being skipped. No given destination for our planetary ship.
Eyes set on the future, the past upon our brow. The time to act has come and gone, what options have we now?
Our deeds placed in motion, no need for retrospect. A time for a reckoning, a cure for our neglect.
The atmosphere polluted, all resources ran dry. Inevitable dilemma, betrayed children cry.
Our lives stored in the cloud, too late for sad regrets. The time grows near for a celestial reset.
We reach to the stars among celestial shores. With hyperactive drives and warp-enabled oars.
Our past written in stone, too late for sad regrets. The time grows near for a celestial reset.
The atmosphere polluted, all resources ran dry. Inevitable dilemma, our hopeless children cry.
Our deeds placed in motion, no need for retrospect. A time for retribution, a cure for our neglect.
Now I lay me down to sleep, strange dreamworks fill my head, tomorrow comes another day, such hope is often said.
Leave this Earth far behind, exploring space throughout my mind.
Retribution on our hands, war paint upon our face. As we marched into battles, we dreamed into space.

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