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After reviewing the lyrics of the song, I feel that the last line of the chorus may work better as the first line of the bridge. I propose an alternate chorus: The things that we, you I/The trouble that our, your my Can't breathe , can't leave, can't cry The wings that she, he fly/the bubble that their their die I Heave, I seethe, I lie. And then for the bridge: Fool in the pool, reflection wavers/ slave in the cave of my own behavior Clown with a frown, turned upside down/stage in the cage of my lost-and-found
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